User:Shabidoo/happymonkeycompetition/2014/RAHB
From Romartus[edit | edit source]
| Creativity | Humour | Originality | Total |
|---|---|---|---|
| 9/10 | 8/10 | 9/10 | 27/30 |
Scored it high for creativity and originality - the article is also well written. Regards the humour, some of the gross out moments don't make sense (what happens in the office of his mother's boss for example) unless that was a surreal moment in the author's mind. No illustrations as yet either. Otherwise, a few extra tweaks and twirls it would get a full house.
From Shabidoo[edit | edit source]
| Creativity | Humour | Originality | Total |
|---|---|---|---|
| 10/10 | 10/10 | 9/10 | 29/30 |
It has continuity and a clear story struture yet it's totally all over the bloody place. Well done. You made me lol so many times I was almost in tears. We all need moments of release like that so you get a 10 out of 10 for humour. Same with creativity...as there is no lack of ideas. A 9 out of 10 for originality...as towards the end I was expecting more or less everything that happened but you could not in any way call this article unoriginal. Well done. A near perfect happy monkey entry.
creativity:drilling ventilation holes in the television, porcupinehijinks.com, Cum Drunk: Love Potion #69, "Silly old man. Children don't know how to navigate the food court!", "blew through the evening breeze like a dandelion spore on a warm spring day, I knew that I'd have to get this costume dry-cleaned in the morning",
humour:No lucky lotto number picks, I was too shocked, but curiously arousing (LOL), lawnmower to the large tree in my front yard and kissed it goodbye (LOL), so I let myself in and masturbated into Mom's latest copy of Variety magazine for a while (LOL), Mom phoned me up later and told me how proud she was (LOL), I blacked out for several hours, This would be the first night I left the house dressed as Batman, fourth grade National Spelling Bee (LOL), We would all need time to heal (LOL), empty condom wrappers and macaroni (LOL), My feet were still covered in hummus (LOL), and the doctor was still droning on about his potential band (LOL), being both deaf and blind (LOL),
originality: The whole thing is pretty damn original
From Napoleon Khan[edit | edit source]
9.5/10
From IFYMB![edit | edit source]
9/10
From The Wiki Man[edit | edit source]
0/10
From Sarah[edit | edit source]
8.5/10
Grand Total[edit | edit source]
83.5/100