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i didnt write this. i just want to see what yall think uv it.

del.icio.us

Tribbuca222 06:51, 3 May 2009 (UTC)

I doubt if you'll find many people prepared to review an article that you have no intention of working on, which is the impression your giving out, Pee review is to help improve articles not just give a thumbs up or down. So if you do intend on working on it after some advice has been given please say. ~Orian57~ ~Talk~ 08:37 3 May 2009

I need something to do. *shurgs* I'll give it a shot. Saberwolf116 13:42, 3 May 2009 (UTC)

Humour:	2	Hmm. Well, it sounds like this article is trying to present something completely false as humor, and isn't doing a very good job of it. It's an article about a made up online deli with a fictional history, and then-what? This article has a good set-up for a joke- the problem is, there's no punchline. I recommend, if you plan working on it, to make some jokes revolve around it- for example, "serving fresh quiche, insert joke here"
Concept:	3	Take something completely made up, and invent a history and product. Usually that kind of thing works on Uncyclopedia, however, this article doesn't really leave any room for jokes, other than completely random ones. It's not really based on a humorous concept, just something out of the blue.
Prose and formatting:	2	This is a problem. The only concievable joke I can find in this article is a list. And these days, lists are *not* funny. Plus, the whole del.icio.us film seems kind of random. If you're gonna stick with this, you need to make a paragraph explaining about the film, who is casting it, and why- you also might want to spell check a few of your existing paragraphs.
Images:	3	Nothing really stands out about the images. Usually, ordinary looking images like those can be funnier with captions. You have 2 options: 1. Photoshop some images so they don't really need a caption, or 2.Make some funnier captions for your existing images.
Miscellaneous:	2	My overall grade of the article.
Final Score:	12	Well, it seems that you found a seemingly random article with little humor in it, and wanted to get someone's opinion on it. Well, here's mine: it sucks. Bad. However, there are some things, if you want to, that can be improved. Firstly, get rid of the list in the film section-transform that into a paragraph, and put some punchlines in it. Second, improve your images. As stated above, you can either replace your existing ones with funny photoshopped ones (you might need to ask someone for help on that one), or, make funnier captions for your existing ones. If you plan on working on this, I hope you take my advice.
Reviewer:	Saberwolf116 14:12, 3 May 2009 (UTC)