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User:Manwithnoname/Naruto[edit source]
(rewrite of Naruto)
Manwithnoname 14:02, 12 October 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 3.5 | Is this supposed to be a parody of the "long rambling fantarded article"? If not, it needs some serious proofreading and pruning. If it is, I didn't catch it until fairly late in the article. You'd need to make the parody nature of the article more prominent. Either way, right now, it just isn't funny, the grammar issues and the author's arguing with himself makes the article almost unreadable, especially given the length, and if it is parody, I'm not seeing it. |
| Concept: | 5 | I would have given it a higher score, but I don't know if your trying to parody a long rambling fantarded article, or if you actually think a long rambling fanarded article is funny. |
| Prose and formatting: | 4 | Several errors in spelling and grammar. I would suggest that you do spelling & grammar check on the article, and read the whole thing out loud to catch any other mistakes. I would also throw in a link or two every paragraph to make it look right. The writing style seems rambling, fillibustering, and almost NRV-ish at times. |
| Images: | 6 | Images are ok. Nothing stands out. |
| Miscellaneous: | 4.6 | average of other scores |
| Final Score: | 23.1 | What are you trying to do with this article? If you leave some comments below, I could help you with it. |
| Reviewer: | --Mnbvcxz 04:31, 9 November 2008 (UTC) | |
P.S. This looks like a randomification of the regular Naruto article, but I can't see what your trying to do with it. Therefore, I really can't give you an in depth review. That generally isn't good, if a joke needs to be explained, its not funny. If you tell me what your trying to do with on this page, I could help you.--Mnbvcxz 06:26, 3 December 2008 (UTC)