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UnNews:Joe Torre Found to have Rare Anti-Smile Disease[edit source]

Better than my first article but I'm still new and need some help. Leave me some suggestions.

Humour: 7 It was pretty funny, could use a bit more cleverness, and more subtle references about how much the Yankees suck.
Concept: 10 Great concept. Torre does, in fact, have Anti Smile Disease
Prose and formatting: 7 The prose could use a bit of work. Make it flow a little more. I might clean it up a little myself.
Images: 8 Relevant for the most part, though I didn't really see the Homer Simpson connection.
Miscellaneous: 7 The Yankees suck.
Final Score: 39 So yes, could use a bit of a touch up, though not bad at all for a second article. I may add an audio to it when my voice gets back to normal.
Reviewer: RAHB 23:41, 22 September 2007 (UTC)