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User:Javascap/UnNews:Unnews Editor Commits Suicide by Slamming his Head on the Keyboard[edit source]
Created this article because I was bored, and didn't have anything to write a real satire on. Too bad for the empty toilet.
Javascap 12:20, 27 March 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 1 | Uhh...yeah. I'm trying not to be too harsh here...but there isn't any humour in there. At all. It's just some buttons mashed in the vague shape of an UnNews, combined with HowTo:Cut Your Own Head Off With a Chainsaw, and then having some more random letters tossed in for good measure. Simply whacking hvyghdbajjustinejucseuctuctsi isn't funny. I see what you're trying to do with the links, but 99.99% of readers will not hover over every word in the UnNews, making this redundantly redundant. |
| Concept: | 1 | A concept that's been done to death, then brought back from the dead with a horse so we can kill the concept again, as well as beat the horse. That's how much random humour's been done here, and we even have more than one piece of random humour that is exactly the same as this (plus the entire contents of Template:Nonsense. It's just been overdone to the point where everyone is sick of it. |
| Prose and formatting: | 2 | Again, this gets marked down heavil since the prose is, well, not prose. And having good, well balanced prose is if anything more important in an UnNews than in a regular article, as it is that much shorter. Your general formatting would be OK if it weren't for the text though, but it just grades that badly because of it. |
| Images: | 2 | I must have seen that image, what...thousands of times before? Including in those two articles I mentioned in the concept section. If you do rewrite this (and I hope you do, you're good enough to make a good UnNews out of this, I've seen your past works), I hope you will be able to find a more original image for it. |
| Miscellaneous: | 1.5 | n/a |
| Final Score: | 7.5 | When Mordillo moved this into your userspace, he said it needed a complete rewrite. He's right. Right now, this is, quite frankly, QVFD fodder, and it needs to become an actual article. |
| Reviewer: | Heerenveen | |