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UnNews:State of Emergency declared in Pakistan, all political assassinations to be suspended

I never actually asked a pee on my Unnews bit, perhaps because I'm too vain? Too silly? Too much? Don't know. Anyhow, any criticism will be welcomed. Ciao. ~ 15:37, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

UH OH MORDILLO you're about to be reviewed by someone who vandalizes user pages. --  Le Cejak • <-> 15:52, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Humour:	8.7	8.6 to 8.7 Avg of all the paragraphs, not taking into account the length. P1 (10) perfect intro with bonus points for <airquotes>, which I will be using from now on. P2 (8) Yes, very good. I don't know what I would improve, and I'm glad it actually reflects Pakistani politics P3 (10) Ha! Awesome. P4 (6) (7) acceptable. the links are kinda interesting. P5 (8) Above average, except that "thanks you" which irked me... unless it was intentional (?) P6 (9) I like the melon thread. Good continuum of the story. P7 (9) I have no idea what Home and Away is, but you make it funny nonetheless.
Concept:	9.5	9 to 9.5... Great idea, however... why Pakistan?
Prose and formatting:	8	It's not pretty, but it is unnews.
Images:	6	acceptable picture of a dude. It relates to the article = acceptable.
Miscellaneous:	8.1	7.9 8.1 avg of the other scores.
Final Score:	40.3	39.5 to 40.3... hmmmm... how to improve... I guess I would add a part about international reaction to the new policy. I'm glad you didn't have any Bush jokes but maybe just throw one in there since he has such a close relationship with Musharraf. Dids I do goods?
Reviewer:	Le Cejak • <-> 15:52, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Hmmmm....Just a couple of pointers:

1. Home and Away is an Australian soap opera being played for ages, quite silly.
2. Why Pakistan? Because it's just happening over there....
3. Regarding the prose - what would you expect? BTW, I don't think that the fact that it's UnNews means that the standards of formatting should be lower, just different.
4. Image=Musharraf, the Pakistani president.
5. Regarding your suggestions - I tried to portray it as an internal issue. Also, I really don't like to put any G. Bush reference in it, we got way too much of them.
6. BTW, did you check the links at paragraph 4?

What do you think? ~ 15:57, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

1. Oh, well... just because it's an Australian soap opera doesn't mean that makes it funnier...
2. Okay... Pakistan. Nice. Let me adjust...
3. UnNews in my eyes is always ugly.
4. Okay, still simply just "acceptable".
5. I know everyone hates Bush references but really: this is one article that relates directly to him. He and Musharraf have a very close working relationship. They've appeared together at speeches, even, for gods sakes!
6. I checked the links. Okay, that's kinda interesting.

Okay, bumped up your score. --  Le Cejak • <-> 16:04, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

Alrighty then, thanks you citizen ;) ~ 16:21, 5 November 2007 (UTC)

You're very welcome. That article was a treat. OOOooh, since you're already here...? --  Le Cejak • <-> 16:26, 5 November 2007 (UTC)