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UnNews:Australia to Aborigines: 'Sorry for the killing and the stealing and stuff'[edit source]
This is the first article I've written in a long time I've liked. But it's not done. For one thing, I have a joke, but I sometime meander off of it, and the piece isn't... unified. Halp! --SirIsaac 03:41, 14 February 2008 (UTC) SirIsaac 03:41, 14 February 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | Funny, though I see a lot more potential in this subject. Most of the humor is found in the dialogue, which works, but again there are more opportunities. Perhaps you could subtly point out that the Australian government is only willing to go as far as an apology to reconcile things. You know, sort of like another half-ass attempt to make things better. If you're having trouble keeping things together, try to answer "Who, what, where, when, why, and how?" more thoroughly. |
| Concept: | 10 | Raping Aborigines is always a funny and clever concept. Though I'm not from Australia, I can sort of relate. I just replaced the word "Aborigine" with "Native American" in my mind. |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | Could've used some more links, maybe a dash to separate the location from the beginning of the article, but all in all not bad. |
| Images: | 9 | I'm not the best judge of images, but the one you have is ok. A picture of an Aborigine woman being raped would've been better, but that's just my opinion. |
| Miscellaneous: | 8 | Audio? Nice. |
| Final Score: | 44 | Good show thus far, ol' chum! Very excellent article. I lolled. |
| Reviewer: | --EMC [TALK] 23:46, 14 February 2008 (UTC) | |