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Steven Moffat

Sylvirfoxx (talk) 00:07, December 18, 2012 (UTC)

Humour:	6	Somewhat funny. Gives quite a few tickles. You've overdone the two pillars - his evilness and influence of Prof Rorimarty - but otherwise it's funny. Random but funny if you ask me. You can add a few sections, like Coupling (I can't believe you didn't include Coupling) Personal life Allegations of Holocaust Planning Also, maybe it's just me, but there are a few areas which are far too slapstick to be funny. Like the conception of Sherlock. The Dr Who section drifts from Moffat to the series itself and the choice of cast, in the second paragraph. You could remove that without making the article any less funny. Instead, include more on Moffat's Dr Who twists. Ones in Series 5? The Pandorica Opens?
Concept:	7	Not too shabby. Projecting Moffat as the injection of mental derangement works fine, and works well. Moreover, most people chancing upon the article are likely to have a preceding hurt of either Sherlock or Dr Who, or both. That will automatically make them relate, and laugh. However, there might be some inconsistency in the Sinister Minister of Evil thingy - in the timeline. At the beginning you say that he's the former SME. Later you mention that he was elected after Rorimarty. Nowhere have you mentioned how/why he is former. Here's a tip: Include why he's a former SME. Possibly because he did something too evil.
Prose and formatting:	8.5	Okay. Few typos here and there. Formatting's fine. Emphases have been used but not effectively.
Images:	5.5	Moar plz. The ones that are there are okay, but we could really use a few more. Like, say, Image, Moffat sitting idly. Caption: In his idle time, Steven Moffat devises new ways of shattering people's hopes and dreams. Image, Moffat sitting at a presscon or something. Badge/plaque denoting he's Sinister Minister of Evil It's never easy with people like Moffat who do not have that many pics outside fanbases. What you have to do is take completely normal images, and give them captions that are funny enough. The captions will save you here. You have the content. Expand them into the images.
Miscellaneous:	6.8	To fix: Add images § 2 - Career. Expand please? § 4 - Sherlock. Badly. Add images (yes) A few more sections if possible
Final Score:	33.8	Not bad. A cookie for the attempt. And some biscuits to help you with improvements. This article has a significant room for improvement. Go ahead.
Reviewer:	Have a nice day. --Tumb13weed (talk) 21:20, 29 June 2013 (UTC)