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Eden Hazard

CDPCCNAC (talk) 11:58, November 27, 2012 (UTC)

Humour:	7	Excellent but anticlimactic. Started off brilliantly, definitely a great beginning. Then, somehow, at Boring Life... the article started losing its funny, and around The Future, it did not remain exciting. Drooped at the conclusion. Tell you what. At the beginning Hazard's demeanour was bold, badass and the like. It slowly turned into a guy desperately seeking a life. He is retelling the story, remember? So either he has to be badass-mild-silly, or the reverse. In the article he is badass(eden)-mild(soccer)-silly(conclusion)-badass(storytelling: introduction). I took off points for the inconsistency.
Concept:	7.5	Excellent once again. And not anticlimactic. Also, a cookie for not including any football humour in it. Well done.
Prose and formatting:	8	Really good. Nowhere have you overdone the emphases. Spelling and grammar are overly important to me, glad your article was clean of those.
Images:	7.2	Good. Two problems. Relevance of the last two images: they are appropriate, just not appropriate enough. Alignment of latter pictures: from the pope to the asplosion. Place them alternately left and right, the page will look a lot better.
Miscellaneous:	7.3	To fix: More than one link points to God in the Beginning. Fix that maybe? Expand the future/conclusion a little bit. It ends too abruptly, and turns insipid towards the end. Add a picture of Hazard, on field, in the Soccer player section. Make sure the caption points out his utterly bored expression. ...and shift the former pope to the Escape section.
Final Score:	37	Great article, though it loses steam as it progresses. Seems as though you wrote it at one go. Impressive. Give it a little makeover and it'll be a riot. All the best.
Reviewer:	Tumb13weed (talk) 19:56, 2 June 2013 (UTC) If you found this review enlightening, please leave this beauty on my user page. Thanks.