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A Bull's Life- A story of racism, prejudice and perseverance[edit source]
You want to review this, you will review this, you won't press the 'previous page' button...--Sir Oliphaunte (განხილვა) 
17:49, January 23, 2011 (UTC)
| Humour: | 8 | I enjoyed the humor in this immensely and I found it consistent. I don't think these jokes are for everyone but that is not a bad thing. While some people find humor in total randomness, this piece, while random in some ways, managed to deliver a strong and fluent pace; which is to say that it did not assault me with a barrage of hard to follow random sentences. It had the foundation of a good narrative to hold my interest between jokes. Another thing i enjoyed was the absurdity of the article. It created an overall humorousness that had me smiling through the entirety of the article. |
| Concept: | 8 | As far as originality goes I have seen a couple stories with the interview format before, But this is my favorite one and the topic is brilliant. I was interested in John Bullingham from the first paragraph to the last. The idea of taking the old idiom of a bull in a china shop an turned it into a stereotype. Then you took the protagonist of your story and gave him an unconditional love for china. Good stuff. I liked the trip to Spain, but have a few ideas, my opinions of course, about the reason he takes the journey. Maybe it could be that he traced his ancestry back to Spain and the trip is a sort of getting in touch with his roots sort of deal. Either way it is good. Your way works too (it is hard to control my own creative impulses sometimes). |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | The only problem I have with the grammatical portion of your work is that the usual typos that come with writing have not been weeded out. once they have been fixed I think the story will read even better. Also you deliver a really funny joke about PETA trying to capture John and release him back into the wild. the scare quotes you used are meant to be typed as, "release" not 'release'. Also it is unnecessary to place these quotes around capture, as they are literally trying to capture John, or wild, as it is actually the wild, that is unless it is not the wild and is meant to be ironic. (yes I used a run-on sentence. I'm here to review you, it is not the other way around, smarty pants.) The formatting is nice. It flows well enough. You do have a few paragraphs that don't text wrap completely around your pictures. I, and this only my opinion, like to keep my paragraphs uniformly aligned. This is not necessary of the next paragraph of course as long as the text is pretty. If you slightly increase the size of the image it might help. fix the typos and you are good. |
| Images: | 8 | I think the pictures fit perfectly with the story and only have a thin margin for betterment. Play around with the formatting to achieve the best look. as it stands though they look good. I am not a pro with the adding pics so I can't say much. |
| Miscellaneous: | 7.5 | Not much to say here. Good stuff. I laughed and managed to read it all as well. It held my attention. |
| Final Score: | 37.5 | I liked this article. As always I have trouble categorizing your work. I do know it belongs here though. Somewhere. |
| Reviewer: | --  17:11, February 4, 2011 (UTC)
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