Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/UnScripts:Interview with a RuneScape Nerd
UnScripts:Interview with a RuneScape Nerd[edit source]
Make sure you know what RuneScape is before you review this. •
| Humour: | 7.14159 | First part - Haha. But "regular-looking"? Maybe you can use other phrases to make the reporter sound regular, instead of plainly stating "regular". And whats with the "type"? Reporter type person? I think a smart-looking reporter would fit in just nice. (I think).
Conversation - Reporter's "debut" is perfectly fine, but Zezima's debut speech is a bit awkward. I mean, would any nerd say that? Most likely (s)he would like, stammer? Facing the computer all day would make a person kind of unsociable. Zezima's law rune thingy should be changed to some kool F2P user's runes. Death runes, perhaps? If the user is a mem, which means you have to remove the F2P, just change it to some nice mem rune. Lava? Astral? I have no idea. Maybe for the part about relationship, you can include that Zezima didn't recall any at first, then he recalled spitefully. Like "Pity the noob". And the tone for the whole convo is like very welcoming... The sentences should be short and hurried, as if Zezima really wanted to go and play Runescape. The make sure you play runescape at the end was funny... |
| Concept: | 6.0000000001 | Ohmygosh I love this article (yes, warcraft sucks) but it's too short. It needs expanding. And where's the setting? It needs a setting, you know? Because if the setting is at home, then maybe *stars* all over the place with *actions* would add to the humor. *laughs*.
Oh, and maybe you can include something below all the convos? Something like "The reporter decided never to interview game addicts again". I don't know. I can't think of any funny catchphrase but I'm sure you can. |
| Prose and formatting: | 5 | 'Links" - No links except AAAA. Please, it's not funny. Maybe just make a few links to articles like WoW or Runescape |
| Images: | 2.222 | Where are the images? Maybe you can use a nerdy looking man portraying Zezima. The average Runescape nerd... |
| Miscellaneous: | 5.1 | Averaged |
| Final Score: | 25.4635900001 | Great Article, can do better. Seems like the score is 25.4635900001 from my preview, but that's a mediocre article. You can do better... |
| Reviewer: | User:Zheliel/sigz2 06:26, 24 May 2009 (UTC) | |