Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/HowTo:Become Stupid in 21 days (second opinion)
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HowTo:Become Stupid in 21 days[edit source]
I'm just looking for a second opinion please.
OptyC Sucks! 
CUN 20:39, 15 March 2008 (UTC)
 | REJOICE! Javascap has reviewed this article! |
| Humour: | 10 | This is my first time handing out a 10 on humour, and I feel it is well deserved. I have earned more then one sideways glance from the teacher next to me and the librarian behind the desk. Although I generally say that a joke is never as funny the second time around, the slamming your head into a brick was, however often it was used, maintained how humourous it was throughout the article. Furthermore, the satire throughout the article was clearly present, and at the same time, almost believable. I am not going to tell you to read over HTBFANJS, you clearly already have! |
| Concept: | 9 | Becoming an idiot seems to be essential for the Uncyclopedia community to thrive, and this definitive article spells out very clearly how to join the wondrous ranks. I liked how you build up to stupidity, rather then plunging headlong into it, and built up to the article. Your article only hit one logistical snag, your article says “You know, the part of town where that guy who married your mom lives?” and later, you made it sound as though the author is out to marry your mom. Just a bit confusing, but meh… |
| Prose and formatting: | 9 | I state, with great joy, that I was completely unable to find any grammatical errors in this entire article, that your sentence structure is nicely varied, and above all, your article flows between sections. Your prose is helped greatly by the pictures, which, as far as I am concerned, are essential to the success of any article. I appreciated the fact you got through without a single red link, that is essential for any article to thrive.
This article only needs 1 thing to get a 10… More categories! |
| Images: | 8 | The images in this article contributed very well to the flow of the article, and all of them had an adequate caption underneath them, pertinent to the section they were next to. This article was longer then the average one I have seen, and the image to text ratio was bearable for my eyes, and all of the pictures were well spaced. My favorite was definitely the brick… excellent punch line on that one. The only suggestion I have would be to throw in a .gif image, if you can find any that will fit. If there are no worthy .gif images, then change that 8 to a 10. |
| Miscellaneous: | 9 | Avg’d as per Pee Review guidelines. |
| Final Score: | 45 | As for any pee review, I always assign homework for the writer to do. First off, I want you to
If you can do all of those, that would do great (Number 1 and 2 are optional), I look forward to seeing this on VFH in the next two weeks. |
| Reviewer: | Warm regards, Javascap 16:53, 17 March 2008 (UTC) | |
And a small something I forgot to add in with my review, Vaseline does not have too much of a smell, maybe put in something with more of a punch (Gasoline certaintly would lubricate, and has a smell from hell, and would screw your body (and brain!) up into oblivion)
Javascap 16:57, 17 March 2008 (UTC)