Uncyclopedia:Pee Review/Xenophilia
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Xenophilia[edit source]
It supposedly needed to be created. I created it. It may not be great and I need to know if that is true or not.
TheGreenOne 19:45, 30 March 2008 (UTC)
 | REJOICE! Javascap has reviewed this article! |
| Humour: | 6 | It might be because I am American, but I was not really laughing at this article. You did have some good points and a few jabs, but nothing was really genuinely funny. I know you have read it (Probably thousands of times) but you might want to reread HTBFANJS, and make jokes from the view of the person reading the article. As I said, you had a lot of jabs, but nothing that had me laughing loudly. |
| Concept: | 8 | I do like how you made a spin off this article, seeming to blame Xenophilia on the Yanks, and you did take this satire pretty far out. I personally liked the nice douse of satire, but however good the concept was, it just… wasn’t presented in a hysterical way. Right now, you look like you wrote a vandalized Wikipedia article, which, although not bad, is not completely what Uncyclopedia is about. |
| Prose and formatting: | 8 | While I might prefer Humour over Humor, I do not have much of an idea as to how British spelling goes, but from my point of view, there was not much of it going on in this article. Aside from the British spelling, your sentence structure was rather nice, and you did have the right length of sentences. I am not sure if this is british spelling, but immeadiately seems to have been misspelled. (immediately)
Another round of small problems are the ever-present plague of Red Links. Looking around, I found three links, which, although not a problem, is still something that can easily be remedied. |
| Images: | 7 | I did like the images, but they didn’t seem to flow with the contents of the article next to them. Your first image (Red Sox Fans and Xenophilia?) didn’t have anything to do with the caption next to them. Your second image was O.K, but I don’t get the joke about the guy in the middle being Greek when that term is not used elsewhere in the article. This article also did not have as many images as I would have expected to have seen (Would have expected three or four). If you are in need of images, you can always look in The Unused Images |
| Miscellaneous: | 7.25 | Avg’d as per Pee Review guidelines |
| Final Score: | 36.25 | Here is the blatent truth, YOU ARE GETTING BETTER. I have been watching your articles get better, and this is quite a significant improvement over the last one I saw. As you remember, I assign homework, so here is what I want to see.
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| Reviewer: | Warm Regards, Javascap | |