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UnNews:Man wins award for "Best Suicide Of The Year"

Tkotse 04:48, 31 March 2008 (UTC)

Humour:	3	From looking at your contributions, I can tell this is your first article you have written, and believe me, your first article is rarely too outstanding. I would recommend that you read HTBFANJS, take a look at the Featured Articles. These help get articles up quite a lot. I will be a bit blunt here, there was not any humour in this article at all. Random humour, as in “xLVxMExKILLxMEx's” is rarely, if ever, funny.
Concept:	5	I have seen plenty of highly unique concepts, and although commiting suicide with a downloaded robot leaves room to play around with, you didn’t really play around too well. I want you to think about this article before giving it another shot.
Prose and formatting:	4	Your grammar hardly came out well for this article, “He goes on to say”, for example, should have been, “He Went on to say”. Furthermore, STEP AWAY from using internet talk, I do not need to see “"thayll all bee sorre when im gon kthxbai” and I absolutely cannot stand unnecessary emphasis. Italics are used to indicate speech, bold is used to indicate a point, the former was used incorrectly and the latter was not used at all. Compared to the rest of Uncyclopedia, UnNews is the hardest section to write at, and unless you are willing to commit to a high standard of English, I would recommend starting at mainspace articles.
Images:	0	I cannot give any credit for images where there are none. In this case, I would recommend trying to find a picture of said man committing suicide with the… robot.
Miscellaneous:	3	Avg’d as per Pee Review guidelines
Final Score:	15	For your first article, this one is a bit better then what I would have expected to see, but you have A LOT of homework to do. I want you to Read HTBFANJS Take a look at the Featured Articles Place a relevant image in. If you have questions about how to place an image in, leave a message on my talk page. Repair the grammar on this article, and if nessecery, ask for help from the Proofreading Service Read over HowTo:Tune up an UnNews article Make a few mainspace article and play around in the sandbox This article is not beyond hope, and I seriously believe that, with a bit of work, you can fix this article up. Good luck!
Reviewer:	Warm Regards, Javascap