Talk:Twenty-eighth Amendment to the United States Constitution
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From Pee Review[edit source]
Ran out of ideas. Anything funny I can add? Can someone piss or jizz on my Peter North article please. If not, just make a pretensious denial face and say, "i don't know who peter north is!" --AmericanBastard 04:34, 3 January 2007 (UTC)
| Humour: | 6 | Could use a little fleshing out, but there's some good jokes in there- the only problem is that most of the humour can be guessed from the title. Try extending it a bit to include somethign more unexpected. |
| Concept: | 8 | Really liked the idea, a nice bit of satire |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | Could use a little tidying up, especially with regard to comma usage, but well paragraphed etc. (by the way, the word "delegating" in the first paragraph- do you possibly mean "dictating"?) Minor problems with grammar at a couple of points, but a quick proof-reading should get rid of those |
| Images: | 8 | Good, I liked to post-it note one. |
| Miscellaneous: | 5 | Needs a little more work but the groundwork is nice. |
| Final Score: | 33 | Would a section on the amendment's implementation be viable? Could be a productive area. Definitely a good start overall though. |
| Reviewer: | --Sir Jam 11:02, 3 January 2007 (UTC) | |
| Humour: | 7 | Ha, this is great. I love the writing style and everything. |
| Concept: | 7 | Well, it's an obvious concept. Add a few 'unexpected twists', but otherwise keep at it in the same way and it shall succeed. |
| Prose and formatting: | 6 | With a bit of polishing (redlinks, categories etc.) and a bit more fleshing out it will be good. |
| Images: | 6 | The post-it note one is good, and I suppose the others do their job, but nothing special. |
| Miscellaneous: | 0 | N/A |
| Final Score: | 26 | Is good. To make VFH, though, I get the feeling some 'out of the box' stuff might be needed, as JT hinted. |
| Reviewer: | Hindleyite Converse • ?pedia 11:52, 3 January 2007 (UTC) | |