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Ken Foree's Birthday[edit source]
A parody of any holiday that is based on a notable person's birthday, using legendary B-movie actor and Dawn of the Dead star Ken Foree as an example of somebody whose birthday shouldn't be a national holiday, but is. I originally got the idea from Pete Best's Birthday. Imagine that.
I just created this and Ken Foree recently and I want to make sure this page is funny. Thank you. 
PF4Eva, the President of Imagination Vote for me My tax returns 23:19, 19 February 2008 (UTC)
| Humour: | 5 | I didn't find this especially funny, mainly because I wasn't entirely sure what I was reading about. The cluttered look of the article makes it difficult for people to establish what the joke is. The list section, as is, is definitely the worst part of the article, as it is more random than funny. Changing this to prose may help. |
| Concept: | 7 | I like this concept a fair bit, and I definitely think it could end up being a very good article. A couple of things: I would have used someone slightly more well-known personality, as it will be funnier to more people; and I would expand a touch on just about everything there, added jokes in the details. |
| Prose and formatting: | 4 | This just looks like a big mess to me right now. There's way too much stuff there, with images, text, captions, links, lists and tables all tripping over each other. The first thing you should do to improve this is half the numbner of images, as there are too many cluttering up the article. I also advise you to change the activities section into prose. On the plus side, your spelling was good. |
| Images: | 4 | As above, there are way too many right now. They all also seem to take bits away from each other. I would personally only keep 2-3 of the current ones, definitely including the first one and definitely removing the .gif. These would be a lot funnier if the reader wasn't overloaded with them.
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| Miscellaneous: | 5 | n/a |
| Final Score: | 25 | This isn't an especially neat article at the moment, but it has potential. It justs needs to be cleaned up a lot and looked after. |
| Reviewer: | –—Hv (talk) 11/03 21:45 | |